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Post by Landon on November 11th 2008, 6:46 pm

A lifetime in a boring corner
And, all I have to do is see
But I refuse to believe
That life is what we have to live


It’s what we have to give
And I, I can’t begin to stress
The feelings that I hold right now
The feelings that I can’t repress

And I’m here to give you
And I’m here to say
That dealing is the only way
‘Cause life, it keeps going on
When it’s going all wrong
And you can’t delay

Overtaken by the shadows of night
Overtaken by constant surprises
And yet, it all seems so fake
And I can’t begin to state
That living is the only way

A lifetime in a boring corner
All you have to do is see
But you refuse to believe


I need an opinion on this. Post them here.

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Re: Need an Opinion

Post by Malaikvavit on November 11th 2008, 6:54 pm


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Re: Need an Opinion

Post by Blue11 on November 11th 2008, 7:01 pm

I think it was nice.



Please click so it will mature.

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Re: Need an Opinion

Post by dominic345 on November 11th 2008, 7:37 pm

nice poem you got there landon
MY AVATAR MOVES
Spoiler:

Looking back at the beginning of this
And how life was
Just you and me and love and all of our friends
Living life like an ocean
But now the currents slowly pulling me down
It's getting harder to breath
It won't be too long and I'll be going under
Can you save me from this

Cause It's not my time,
I'm not going
There's a fear in me
It's not showing
This could be the end of me
And everything I know
Oh, but I won't go

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Re: Need an Opinion

Post by Jpg 40 on November 18th 2008, 3:47 pm

was that yours?it was pretty good

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Re: Need an Opinion

Post by Latiosmaster47 on November 20th 2008, 10:36 pm

Malaikvavit wrote:

I lol'd.

Not bad, a nice poem overall.

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Re: Need an Opinion

Post by pokeboy on December 31st 2008, 6:24 pm

It was OK i guess. im not sure.

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